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I read about people whose
brains one day
decide a lover's eyes are
too right framed by a voice
and touch like soft fur in
your lap, on your face

and remembered you drinking
my bathwater
before you crawled
in on me, abuses soaking
and matting down around
your lap, above your face.

I remembered that first time
you had me just leave
it for you and I heard you
dunking your head in lukewarm,
filmy stranger. You sat beside
me later, dripping tears maybe to
your lap, from your face

and as the drain was pulled, there was me
still clipping nails, leaving them out
for you with milk and old hairs from
the pillow, your eyes' light straying often
to my lap, but not my face.
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Given 2013-08-17
Capgras delusion is by ~Wataqo ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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kremlin-dawn Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
It's not often that the thumbnail of a literature DD interests me enough that I actually click on it, but this is definitely one of the exceptions. Captivating from beginning to end with imagery interesting and unique enough to match the concept. Usually I think minimal punctuation/capitalization to be a bit cliched, but here the theme of disconnection from reality almost requires it. I couldn't BELIEVE that other commenters had so many negative things to say; I think this is a well-deserved DD! :heart:
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Wataqo Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013   Writer
Thanks a lot for saying so.
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PoundPuppyFan Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Dafuq?
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Lady-Weavile-461 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Sounds like you're describing a dog or cat :)
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Cutebunnypink Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Artist
I love how the words flow.....
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Achille1996 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013
Truly beautiful, in every way. :)
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Wataqo Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013   Writer
Thank ya
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Achille1996 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013
you're welcome :)
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kohakulove Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013
well, I don't understand it at all, but this poem is still very moving. It's like looking through a tiny hole in a fence; I'm getting just a glimpse into another world, and I can't tell if it's beautiful or terrifying, but it is fascinating.
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Wataqo Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013   Writer
Thanks a bunch.
I wrote an explanation somewheres in the comments here, if you'd like to understand it better. 
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